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Clear Air Turbulence - Draft 5 by David Young, written for Twisted50, uploaded 01 Aug '16 16:20 @turkeysflying

A chance conversation on a bumpy flight changes the fate of two men.

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Publisher and editor notes

Hi David,

Elinor here.

Here are some notes on your great story.

  • Page 2 is missing a word, I think: 'She down and then continued on.'
  • Further on, when the American puts 19H out of his misery, I think this section could stand a little expansion. Just how desperate is the American?
  • Then, after that, I don't feel you need the exposition from the perspective of the monitors, you could just cut it. I think it would make the whole story much tighter.

Happy editing.

Monday 15th August '16

Hi David,

Elinor here.

Excellent work! I just love what you've done. This baby is LOCKED!

 

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Clear Air Turbulence - Draft 4 by David Young, written for Twisted50, uploaded 30 Nov '15 19:24 @turkeysflying

A chance conversation on a bumpy flight changes the fate of two men.

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David Young - Draft 3 by David Young, written for Twisted50, uploaded 30 Nov '15 01:20 @turkeysflying

A chance conversation on a bumpy flight changes the fate of two men.

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Clear Air Turbulence - Draft 2 by David Young, written for Twisted50, uploaded 28 Oct '15 17:14 @flyingturkeys

A chance conversation on a bumpy flight changes the fate of two men.

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Clear Air Turbulence - Draft 1 by David Young, written for Twisted50, uploaded 15 Aug '15 22:10 @turkeysflying

A chance conversation on a bumpy flight changes the fate of two men.

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