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Food Bank - Draft 3 by Dylan Keeling, written for Twisted50, uploaded 17 May '16 16:33

There are some places it isn't wise to walk through...especially after dinner.

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Publisher and editor notes

Hi Dylan,
great to hear from you re: edits. Here you go...

  • I think you could easily cut all the convo that Sandy and the feral boys have about murder. Their appearance and their kicking of the little girl's cage is enough, I feel. Maybe Sandy could be drawn to the cage because she thinks they're tormenting a dog. She could be a bit repelled when she sees the little girl.
  • Sandy's transformation from greedy BF-dumping bitch to suddenly caring for the little girl seemed a little jarring to me. Maybe if she lets the little girl out but the child grabs hold of her and won't let go then the feral kids appear and herd them up the stairs.

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Food Bank - Draft 2 by Dylan Keeling, written for Twisted50, uploaded 12 Oct '15 21:21 @MrDylanKeeling

There are some places it isn't wise to walk through...especially after dinner.

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Food Bank - Draft 1 by Dylan Keeling, written for Twisted50, uploaded 19 Aug '15 12:49 @MrDylanKeeling

There are some places it isn't wise to walk through...especially after dinner.

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