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Us - Draft 6 by Hillier Townsend (Hillier Townsend), written for Twisted50, uploaded 04 Jun '16 02:27

The 11th Commandment: Thou Shalt Leave the Hidden Hid

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Hey Su, as we have been discussing via email, we have a few questions for you:

  • Is Ginny human? How come she lives among them?
  • What were 'HER' arrangements?
  • Did the police get 'Them' and then let 'Them' go again so 'They' could clean up?
  • Who does he think he can convince to drive him down the highway?

We think a few subtle anwers to these questions would tie your story up beautifully. Great Su, you really are a great writer!

 

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Us - Draft 5 by Hillier Townsend (Hillier Townsend), written for Twisted50, uploaded 11 May '16 22:47

The 11th Commandment: Thou Shalt Leave the Hidden Hid

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Us - Draft 4 by Hillier Townsend (Hillier Townsend), written for Twisted50, uploaded 25 Nov '15 04:16

The 11th Commandment: Thou Shalt Leave the Hidden Hid

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Us - Draft 3 by Hillier Townsend (Hillier Townsend), written for Twisted50, uploaded 12 Nov '15 06:49

The 11th Commandment: Thou Shalt Leave the Hidden Hid

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Us - Draft 2 by Hillier Townsend (Hillier Townsend), written for Twisted50, uploaded 30 Oct '15 03:21

The 11th Commandment: Thou Shalt Leave the Hidden Hid

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Us - Draft 1 by Hillier Townsend (Hillier Townsend), written for Twisted50, uploaded 30 Sep '15 17:01

The 11th Commandment: Thou Shalt Leave the Hidden Hid

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