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The Ballad of Liam and Chantelle - Draft 4 by steven stockford, written for Twisted50, uploaded 19 May '16 13:46

You can chop up her face, gouge out an eye, but you know, you might still just need her. Love eh?

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Publisher and editor notes

Hi Steven, grand to chat with you just now!

May I suggest the following:

  • Cut the final paragraph about Chantelle’s regrets.

  • Also, alternate their POVs a bit more, so that we see Chantelle’s forgiveness of Liam, before we see how glad she is that she has a boyfriend everyone’s scared of.

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The Ballad of Liam and Chantelle - Draft 3 by steven stockford, written for Twisted50, uploaded 30 Nov '15 09:47

You can chop up her face, gouge out an eye, but you know, you might still just need her. Love eh?

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The Ballad of Liam and Chantelle - Draft 2 by steven stockford, written for Twisted50, uploaded 22 Nov '15 15:50

You can chop up her face, gouge out an eye, but you know, you might still just need her. Love eh?

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The Ballad of Liam and Chantelle - Draft 1 by steven stockford, written for Twisted50, uploaded 05 Nov '15 11:39

You can chop up her face, gouge out an eye, but you know, you might still just need her. Love eh?

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