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The Turned - Draft 5 by Mat Sunderland, written for Twisted50, uploaded 01 Jul '16 14:31 @MatSunderland

A man tries to save the world from his own devastating action.

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Hi Mat,

Elinor here.

I have three edits for your haunting story:

  • Check your tense use 'I was stood' should be 'I was standing'.
  • Who is the test subject? Is it his son? If so, I think you should make that more explicit, as it would be so impactful and moving if he sacifices himself for his child.
  • Where the dogs are running through the Turned, clarify whether they are eating them or not.

Other than that, great work!

18th July 2016

Hi Mat,

nice work on the edits. My only note is about the identity of the bedroom patient.

  • I feel their significance to your protagonist is important. His sacrifice would then be all the more impactful.

That is literally it!

Thanks Mat, this baby is LOCKED!

 

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The Turned - Draft 4 by Mat Sunderland, written for Twisted50, uploaded 30 Nov '15 15:11 @MatSunderland

A man tries to save the world from his own devastating action.

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Mat Sunderland - Draft 3 by Mat Sunderland, written for Twisted50, uploaded 28 Nov '15 20:20 @MatSunderland

A man tries to save the world from his own devastating action.

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The Turned - Draft 2 by Mat Sunderland, written for Twisted50, uploaded 26 Nov '15 12:07 @MatSunderland

A man tries to save the world from his own devastating action.

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The Turned - Draft 1 by Mat Sunderland, written for Twisted50, uploaded 25 Nov '15 10:19 @MatSunderland

A man tries to save the world from his own devastating action.

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