The writer has delivered their final draft.
A man tries to save the world from his own devastating action.
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I have three edits for your haunting story:
- Check your tense use 'I was stood' should be 'I was standing'.
- Who is the test subject? Is it his son? If so, I think you should make that more explicit, as it would be so impactful and moving if he sacifices himself for his child.
- Where the dogs are running through the Turned, clarify whether they are eating them or not.
Other than that, great work!
18th July 2016
nice work on the edits. My only note is about the identity of the bedroom patient.
- I feel their significance to your protagonist is important. His sacrifice would then be all the more impactful.
That is literally it!
Thanks Mat, this baby is LOCKED!