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The Cyclist - Draft 6 by Richie Brown, written for Twisted50, uploaded 24 May '16 14:22

Think bike.

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Publisher and editor notes

Great job Rich! As discussed with you, simply a bit of tightening up to do:

  • Consider not using upper case to emphasize your point, trust in the strength of your writing.
  • Read it out loud to yourself and see if you hear repetitions which could be cut, without losing the melodic flow of Merle's voice. 
  • Consider cutting the sentence: "...the bicycle, in the glimpse...neon yellow reflective jacket." Instead add a key word into the following sentence to convey the purpose (of this long sentence above, as discussed). 

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The Cyclist - Draft 5 by Richie Brown, written for Twisted50, uploaded 23 May '16 14:39

Think bike.

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The Cyclist - Draft 4 by Richie Brown, written for Twisted50, uploaded 09 May '16 12:00

Think bike.

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The Cyclist - Draft 3 by Richie Brown, written for Twisted50, uploaded 06 May '16 12:36

Think bike.

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The Cyclist - Draft 2 by Richie Brown, written for Twisted50, uploaded 30 Nov '15 21:23

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The Cyclist - Draft 1 by Richie Brown, written for Twisted50, uploaded 30 Nov '15 18:34

Think bike.

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